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I am quick but graceful
Gentle and cold.
I am a wallflower
Drenched in the summer rains;
a smell that fills the souls and hearts of many.
I am alive but silent,
Invisible to most.
I remain unseen.
A child colors a sky with me
With cornflower crayons
A sky filled with white birds
Flying free, above the waves of my ocean.
Calm and tranquil.
Living inside a silent amour
Where two lovers collide.
I taste salty and leave a tingle on the tip of your tongue
Yet you still crave more.
I am small.
I am discreet.
I am the unknown.
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this was another assignment for school.

can you guess what color it is?

someone told me it was "tight" :P

but i just got it back on today and my teacher said i didnt have good imagery and then added some other shit. you can see why im pissed. to be honest, i thought this was one of my best. but thats just me.

comment as you wish.

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:iconblucrimson:
You wrote an awesome piece...don't let anyone tell you different.
A poet doesn't write by someone elses expectations

The poem is a little myth of man's capacity of making life meaningful. And in the end, the poem is not a thing we see --it is, rather, a light by which we may see -- and what we see is life.
Robert Penn Warren

big hugs
...blu

--
You see things; and you say, "Why?" But I dream things that never were; and I say, "Why not?"
George Bernard Shaw
:iconrunningalonetogether:
that was amazing.... much better than my poem

im gonna guess that the color is the rainbow
:iconblackballetshoes:
no not rainbow. and i will call you sometime later tonight.

--
- Melanie

"Screw perfection. Just embrace the greatness [LIFE] as it is."
:iconksted:
Blue?
White?

Your teacher is an idiot.

--
Kirsten


...Remember, today is the tomorrow you worried about yesterday...
:iconrunningalonetogether:
awwww...... then is it black?
:iconhiroglycerin:
isnt this an old submit? and what happned to your life plans sheet! i was gonna secretly follow you round the world since i had your life mapped out...

--
when one door closes move so it doesn't hit you in the face.
:iconblackballetshoes:
....BLUE, MATT ,BLUE!!!

jesus.

--
- Melanie

"Screw perfection. Just embrace the greatness [LIFE] as it is."
:iconblackballetshoes:
yayayay you got it right. its bllueee.

and she is a terrible teacher.

--
- Melanie

"Screw perfection. Just embrace the greatness [LIFE] as it is."
:iconblackballetshoes:
nooppe. i just wrote this like last week. i might have showed you it before hand though.
oh thats just one of the many plans. but dont worry, ill come visit you and ill do your nails and well have tea that tastes like pee.

--
- Melanie

"Screw perfection. Just embrace the greatness [LIFE] as it is."

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